Jeannie, who blogs as The Writtennubbin, commented in response to my post Hunter-Gatherer and this led to the following exchange of haiku. We had great fun. Hope you enjoy it – once we got started, took minutes of each other…
Eric (February 29, 2012 at 7:46 am)
Painful lessons paid
With shattered lives, families
Oh, a sorry trade
Jeannie (February 29, 2012 at 9:35 am)
Sorrow and pain knocks
On the door of foolish men
There’s no place to hide
Eric (February 29, 2012 at 9:42 am)
Hiding from his shame
Lying words, thoughtless actions
Discard worthless pride
Jeannie (February 29, 2012 at 9:48 am)
There is no pride left
Only bitter trails of woe
Littered path of lies
Eric (February 29, 2012 at 9:54 am)
Man’s honour for sale
Man’s integrity buried
Notches on his sleeve
Jeannie (February 29, 2012 at 10:12 am)
A false bravado
Is your only claim to fame
Glass houses shatter
Eric (February 29, 2012 at 10:15 am) Very good Jeannie – keep it coming
To love and protect
Covenants in His presence
Man, whereof your word?
Jeannie (February 29, 2012 at 10:27 am)
Words lightly spoken
No promises meant to keep
A false devotion
Eric (February 29, 2012 at 10:34 am)
Man, behold My Word
You lied before My Presence
A price you will pay
Jeannie (February 29, 2012 at 10:45 am)
I AM that I AM
I know you for what you are
Yea! Vengeance is mine!
Eric (February 29, 2012 at 10:49 am) I really love this haiku about vengeance, Jeannie. Brought a smile to me 🙂 Perhaps time for some positivity…
Let us dust our shoes
Leaving baggage, journey forth
Find that one true love
Jeannie (February 29, 2012 at 10:56 am) Please say “when” you post the final words. I don’t want to overstay my welcome.
Seems I’ve forgotten
What a true love really is
Bestow the blessing
Eric (February 29, 2012 at 10:59 am) No worries Jeannie. I am enjoying this and you are one talented lady. Okay, I have to leave in another 30 minutes. Let us do two/three more each and we are done, ok?
I come bearing love
Tempered by a betrayal
My love strong and true
Jeannie (February 29, 2012 at 11:04 am)
Oh! To believe you
It is too good to be true
My heart yearns for love
Eric (February 29, 2012 at 11:09 am)
Let’s cross the threshold
Leave our sorrows at the door
Our lives twin shadows
Jeannie (February 29, 2012 at 11:14 am) This has been so much fun! Your talent shines through like a star–please take the finale. xoxox
I will trust in you
And freely give you my heart
To have and to hold
Eric (February 29, 2012 at 11:17 am)
Not into sunset
We ride into the sunrise
Saddlebags of hope
Eric: We did it 🙂 You and I. It was so exhilarating and thank you so very much, Jeannie. You have my deep respect. Luv and peace, Eric
Jeannie: Thank you my friend. It is been a real pleasure. Beautifully done!
For those not familiar with Jeannie’s The Writtennubbin, I suggest you pop over and trawl her blog.
She is an open and confident person who handled criticism of her prose with grace and maturity. As a business person and after recently publishing a few books, I decided to spend time in literary circles – found most authors egoistical. Jeannie, in contrast, is a breath of fragrant air.
She now focuses on haiku/poetry. However, I hope she will also do prose… 🙂
This was beautiful sentiment spoken in haiku, a language all its own. Very artful and impressive!
A true raining of haikus! and it was a delightful one! beautiful and lovely!
Glad you found it delightful.
Anytime you or I post a haiku next – let’s get started.
I have a haiku scheduled for this Saturday 23 Feb based on the Fallen Grace episodes – as a preamble to the next Fallen Grace installment on Sunday 24 Feb.
Hope to see you there 🙂
Sure Eric! 🙂
Oh, please don’t forget to let me know when you are posting a haiku – so that I can remember to visit your blog. I get so many notifications, I might miss some.
P/s This Sunday, I’m not really free due to church and family commitments – just a little heads up.
I usually dont post Haiku’s ..but if I do I will let you know prior to it.
Raining Haiku, what a wonderful image! I had to come and watch the small verses fall!
Thank you Hattie. Hope it did not disappoint. Cheers, Eric (P/s I left a comment in your poetry blog)
Glad you liked it Aparna.
It was impromtu and great fun. There is another exchange – Poetic Salivation > http://wp.me/s1YE83-1728 if you wish to check out both content and timing.
P/s Please chcek your spam – my comment was swallowed by the mean machine
giving words color
to a world without vision
reflections of love
Beautiful work by you and Jeannie. You should both be proud of this wonderful creation. Thank you for sharing…….
Your haiku is marvellous – you should seriously consider writing more. I am a great fan of people who can say much with less…it not only encourages one to dwell on the essence but is also a reflection of one’s soul and wisdom.
Yes, Jeannie was great and we both made a great duet 🙂
All good wishes, Eric 🙂
Eric, Yay! I finally got another notification email of a new post of yours just today after realizing last night I hadn’t seen anything from you in a few days and was going to manually access your blog today! Anway, now I am playing catchup! I LOVED this haiku dialogue you entered into with Jeannie. So pleased to see the positive ending! I think you are correct about many writers being egotistical! There two fiction writers, both guys, I follow online that are hilarious in their projected images of themselves! Talking about ego! But I get such great ideas for critterly character traits that I cannot resist following them! Yes, being able to take and utilize constructive criticism is the mark of a mature person, it seems to me!
Dear Granbee 🙂
Yes, sometimes the gnomes in WP are hyperactive. I don’t always receive notifications of all the blogs I follow…
Jeannie is a talented soul and that made doing the “tango” delightful. A positive approach to life and criticism keeps us growing, I reckon.
Delighted to have you visit,
Hehehehe… i dont know what to say,
nice work bro.
You’ve already said it bro. Thanks 🙂
That’s the spirit 🙂
you are wellcome and thank you for visit my blog… 🙂
i enjoyed that
I am glad and thank you.
Eric and Jeannie, I simply loved this flurry of Haiku exchanges, where you each drew on the thoughts and inspiration of the other – awesome! Really well done, both of you, and a delight to read. ~ Julie 🙂
Thank you Julie for these kind words. It was a delightful exchange, Eric 🙂
You both bring the best of each other! You should write such Haikus more often, I truly enjoyed reading it.
You are so sweet Rana. Thank you dear and all good wishes 🙂
You guys really had a lot of fun! Such an exciting moment you had there! 😀
Thank you Indra. We did 🙂
Drop by Jeannie’s blog too for some pearls… 🙂
Words are sharp when carved
Sharper than the sharpest sword
Swords are now but blunt
I wonder whether you had checked out my post on 7 Jan 2012 > “Mightier than your sword” > http://wp.me/p1YE83-eJ
Thanks for the link. I hadn’t checked out the post earlier.
Nice one…..liked it….
Much appreciate you stopping by with a comment. Cheers, Eric
This was so fun and great to read, to see how one was built upon the other….as it went along, it got more to the heart, I thought….this was wonderful, thanks for sharing it!
You are welcome Celeste. I enjoy your posts too – and keep spreading the sunshine. We need more sunrises, Eric 🙂
Hi Eric, thank you for liking some of my posts which brought me back to this post of yours. What a lovely play of words by both of you. I quote your line “that was a great tango”, enjoyable to read and noticeably enjoyable to write for both of you. I have never tried Haiku but reading this was like music playing in my ear. Great work!
Thank you so very much. Yes, Jeannie and I had great fun. I enjoyed my visit to you blog and plan to return. All good wishes, Eric