Jeannie, who blogs as The Writtennubbin, commented in response to my post Hunter-Gatherer and this led to the following exchange of haiku. We had great fun. Hope you enjoy it – once we got started, took minutes of each other…

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Eric (February 29, 2012 at 7:46 am)

Painful lessons paid

With shattered lives, families

Oh, a sorry trade

Jeannie (February 29, 2012 at 9:35 am)

Sorrow and pain knocks

On the door of foolish men

There’s no place to hide

Eric (February 29, 2012 at 9:42 am)

Hiding from his shame

Lying words, thoughtless actions

Discard worthless pride

Jeannie (February 29, 2012 at 9:48 am)

There is no pride left

Only bitter trails of woe

Littered path of lies

Eric (February 29, 2012 at 9:54 am)

Man’s honour for sale

Man’s integrity buried

Notches on his sleeve

Jeannie (February 29, 2012 at 10:12 am)

A false bravado

Is your only claim to fame

Glass houses shatter

Eric (February 29, 2012 at 10:15 am) Very good Jeannie – keep it coming

To love and protect

Covenants in His presence

Man, whereof your word?

Jeannie (February 29, 2012 at 10:27 am)

Words lightly spoken

No promises meant to keep

A false devotion

Eric (February 29, 2012 at 10:34 am)

Man, behold My Word

You lied before My Presence

A price you will pay

Jeannie (February 29, 2012 at 10:45 am)

I AM that I AM

I know you for what you are

Yea! Vengeance is mine!

Eric (February 29, 2012 at 10:49 am) I really love this haiku about vengeance, Jeannie. Brought a smile to me 🙂 Perhaps time for some positivity…

Let us dust our shoes

Leaving baggage, journey forth

Find that one true love

Jeannie (February 29, 2012 at 10:56 am) Please say “when” you post the final words. I don’t want to overstay my welcome.

Seems I’ve forgotten

What a true love really is

Bestow the blessing

Eric (February 29, 2012 at 10:59 am) No worries Jeannie. I am enjoying this and you are one talented lady. Okay, I have to leave in another 30 minutes. Let us do two/three more each and we are done, ok?

I come bearing love

Tempered by a betrayal

My love strong and true

Jeannie (February 29, 2012 at 11:04 am)

Oh! To believe you

It is too good to be true

My heart yearns for love

Eric (February 29, 2012 at 11:09 am)

Let’s cross the threshold

Leave our sorrows at the door

Our lives twin shadows

Jeannie (February 29, 2012 at 11:14 am) This has been so much fun! Your talent shines through like a star–please take the finale. xoxox

I will trust in you

And freely give you my heart

To have and to hold

Eric (February 29, 2012 at 11:17 am)

Not into sunset

We ride into the sunrise

Saddlebags of hope

Eric: We did it 🙂 You and I. It was so exhilarating and thank you so very much, Jeannie. You have my deep respect. Luv and peace, Eric

Jeannie: Thank you my friend. It is been a real pleasure. Beautifully done!

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For those not familiar with Jeannie’s The Writtennubbin, I suggest you pop over and trawl her blog.

She is an open and confident person who handled criticism of her prose with grace and maturity. As a business person and after recently publishing a few books, I decided to spend time in literary circles – found most authors egoistical. Jeannie, in contrast, is a breath of fragrant air.

She now focuses on haiku/poetry. However, I hope she will also do prose… 🙂

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81 comments

    1. Glad you found it delightful.

      Anytime you or I post a haiku next – let’s get started.

      I have a haiku scheduled for this Saturday 23 Feb based on the Fallen Grace episodes – as a preamble to the next Fallen Grace installment on Sunday 24 Feb.

      Hope to see you there 🙂

      1. Oh, please don’t forget to let me know when you are posting a haiku – so that I can remember to visit your blog. I get so many notifications, I might miss some.
        Cheers, Eric
        P/s This Sunday, I’m not really free due to church and family commitments – just a little heads up.

  1. giving words color
    to a world without vision
    reflections of love

    Beautiful work by you and Jeannie. You should both be proud of this wonderful creation. Thank you for sharing…….

    1. Your haiku is marvellous – you should seriously consider writing more. I am a great fan of people who can say much with less…it not only encourages one to dwell on the essence but is also a reflection of one’s soul and wisdom.

      Yes, Jeannie was great and we both made a great duet 🙂

      All good wishes, Eric 🙂

  2. Eric, Yay! I finally got another notification email of a new post of yours just today after realizing last night I hadn’t seen anything from you in a few days and was going to manually access your blog today! Anway, now I am playing catchup! I LOVED this haiku dialogue you entered into with Jeannie. So pleased to see the positive ending! I think you are correct about many writers being egotistical! There two fiction writers, both guys, I follow online that are hilarious in their projected images of themselves! Talking about ego! But I get such great ideas for critterly character traits that I cannot resist following them! Yes, being able to take and utilize constructive criticism is the mark of a mature person, it seems to me!

    1. Dear Granbee 🙂

      Yes, sometimes the gnomes in WP are hyperactive. I don’t always receive notifications of all the blogs I follow…

      Jeannie is a talented soul and that made doing the “tango” delightful. A positive approach to life and criticism keeps us growing, I reckon.

      Delighted to have you visit,
      Eric

  3. Eric and Jeannie, I simply loved this flurry of Haiku exchanges, where you each drew on the thoughts and inspiration of the other – awesome! Really well done, both of you, and a delight to read. ~ Julie 🙂

  4. This was so fun and great to read, to see how one was built upon the other….as it went along, it got more to the heart, I thought….this was wonderful, thanks for sharing it!
    Celeste

  5. Hi Eric, thank you for liking some of my posts which brought me back to this post of yours. What a lovely play of words by both of you. I quote your line “that was a great tango”, enjoyable to read and noticeably enjoyable to write for both of you. I have never tried Haiku but reading this was like music playing in my ear. Great work!

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