Jeannie, who blogs as The Writtennubbin, commented in response to my post Hunter-Gatherer and this led to the following exchange of haiku. We had great fun. Hope you enjoy it – once we got started, took minutes of each other…
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Eric (February 29, 2012 at 7:46 am)
Painful lessons paid
With shattered lives, families
Oh, a sorry trade
Jeannie (February 29, 2012 at 9:35 am)
Sorrow and pain knocks
On the door of foolish men
There’s no place to hide
Eric (February 29, 2012 at 9:42 am)
Hiding from his shame
Lying words, thoughtless actions
Discard worthless pride
Jeannie (February 29, 2012 at 9:48 am)
There is no pride left
Only bitter trails of woe
Littered path of lies
Eric (February 29, 2012 at 9:54 am)
Man’s honour for sale
Man’s integrity buried
Notches on his sleeve
Jeannie (February 29, 2012 at 10:12 am)
A false bravado
Is your only claim to fame
Glass houses shatter
Eric (February 29, 2012 at 10:15 am) Very good Jeannie – keep it coming
To love and protect
Covenants in His presence
Man, whereof your word?
Jeannie (February 29, 2012 at 10:27 am)
Words lightly spoken
No promises meant to keep
A false devotion
Eric (February 29, 2012 at 10:34 am)
Man, behold My Word
You lied before My Presence
A price you will pay
Jeannie (February 29, 2012 at 10:45 am)
I AM that I AM
I know you for what you are
Yea! Vengeance is mine!
Eric (February 29, 2012 at 10:49 am) I really love this haiku about vengeance, Jeannie. Brought a smile to me 🙂 Perhaps time for some positivity…
Let us dust our shoes
Leaving baggage, journey forth
Find that one true love
Jeannie (February 29, 2012 at 10:56 am) Please say “when” you post the final words. I don’t want to overstay my welcome.
Seems I’ve forgotten
What a true love really is
Bestow the blessing
Eric (February 29, 2012 at 10:59 am) No worries Jeannie. I am enjoying this and you are one talented lady. Okay, I have to leave in another 30 minutes. Let us do two/three more each and we are done, ok?
I come bearing love
Tempered by a betrayal
My love strong and true
Jeannie (February 29, 2012 at 11:04 am)
Oh! To believe you
It is too good to be true
My heart yearns for love
Eric (February 29, 2012 at 11:09 am)
Let’s cross the threshold
Leave our sorrows at the door
Our lives twin shadows
Jeannie (February 29, 2012 at 11:14 am) This has been so much fun! Your talent shines through like a star–please take the finale. xoxox
I will trust in you
And freely give you my heart
To have and to hold
Eric (February 29, 2012 at 11:17 am)
Not into sunset
We ride into the sunrise
Saddlebags of hope
Eric: We did it 🙂 You and I. It was so exhilarating and thank you so very much, Jeannie. You have my deep respect. Luv and peace, Eric
Jeannie: Thank you my friend. It is been a real pleasure. Beautifully done!
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For those not familiar with Jeannie’s The Writtennubbin, I suggest you pop over and trawl her blog.
She is an open and confident person who handled criticism of her prose with grace and maturity. As a business person and after recently publishing a few books, I decided to spend time in literary circles – found most authors egoistical. Jeannie, in contrast, is a breath of fragrant air.
She now focuses on haiku/poetry. However, I hope she will also do prose… 🙂
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I really enjoyed this exchange Eric. I love that you include the times so I can imagine the typing back and forth and the exhilaration once you hit the publish button at the end of the haiku’s. Love it!
Thank you Christy. It is always lovely to hear from you. Isn’t Jeannie talented and a fast draw 🙂 Luv and hugz, Eric
we were exhillarated too! What a journey through haikus. the rise, fall and rise of love 🙂
…the peaks and troughs of love 🙂
Hello again Eric,
Somehow between the eloquent, the verbose, the confused, the cluttered, and the obfuscated there is clarity to be gleaned.
If I were to envision the perfect dream but could not find words to describe it, how should I enlist the help of others (yourself?) to give it life? To live it out?
Can you write a haiku on “Freedom” for us? Post it here: http://mlbergitn.wordpress.com/xplore/what-you-pay-for/
As you already discovered–we’re not there as a society (nay, not even in Singapore). How do we convince this global community to approach life with collaboration? Are we damned?
Personally I don’t read much (too busy with making inaccurate observations). I believe the solution to this problem won’t be reached in the lifetime of anyone endeavoring to work on it.
If you are open to the idea I will attach an essay (written for scholarship consideration and submitted to UMKC last month). I’d like to get your opinion. You could send an address to mlberg.caregiver.blog@gmail.com and I’ll get it.
Thanks again,
Dan
Hello Dan,
I do have a haiku on “Freedom” written somewhere and shall post it here. Do look out for it – and obviously, if you wish, feel free to reblog.
My opinion on the essay for scholarship? I’m afraid not. I’m no scholar – certainly not in the literary arts.
All good wishes with that scholarship.
Eric
Thanks for your reply Eric,
The difference between a literary giant and a literary genius is literally 1/4 inch (0.635 cm). Ha! I write like an engineer because you know what…I are one. (Okay, enough of the corny jokes.)
You see what needs to get started. A transparency between youthful ignorance and the cunning of old age would help us to empathize with day-to-day survival. Youth slips away; old age makes unrecoverable mistakes. We all lose by not becoming better caregivers.
The reason I offered my essay was because wordsmithing is a craft. Hindsight, scrutiny, and reevaluation all influence where it is still possible for us to go. The essay may be framed in my specific history but it could just as easily been written by others with differing backgrounds and experiences. The key here is what would be the same. Same goals? Same opinions? Same observations? Same freedoms?
So no harm intended by my asking. Thank you. Dan
Hi Eric,
Okay I fixed the dilemma (if it was about divulging email addresses): http://mlbergitn.wordpress.com/all-come-forward/
I still don’t know how to express sincerity about my concerns but I am earnestly trying to facilitate learning. Our descendents need to be blessed abundantly.
Dan
I loved the poetic banter…I think both of you are very talented…what a crative and fun way to play. I hope that what you did spurs on others with such creativity, I know it has for me…thank you
Thank you Kris and it is great that you are also considering something along these lines…we can all learn from each other, enjoy and grow. All good wishes, Eric
This is a really great idea. Much of it is very powerful without the effect of making feel wounded (I don’t need that on a Friday!). I really enjoy the show of creativity.
All done in fun, Eric and we carry each other as we raft along – laughing, a little anxious perhaps and bonding. Great blogging community, this. Do visit Jeannie’s blog – she has some nuggets stashed away. Peace and luv, Eric
I will be keeping up with her blog.
Eric I wanted to give you the Sunshine Award (I know you already have it) because you bring bright sunshine into my life … http://wp.me/p1l7Si-yk Love to you buddy x
Awww Jane dear,
You spoil me so. This world needs all the “sunshine” we can get. Many bloggers including you are helping to spread this.
Basking in your sunshine,
your buddy Eric
Thank you for sharing. The exchange between you two was fun to read. I had forgotten how much I love Haiku, something I’ve never been very good at though.
You are very welcome Susan. Jeannie made it that much more fun. I appreciate your kind words, Eric 🙂
These haikus are great to read..what a wonderful energy you two created there – love to you both Jane x
Thank you buddy Jane.
If you have not already, do visit Jeannie’s blog – like me, I am sure you’ll enjoy the reads.
Lots of luv and hugz,
Eric
amazing exchange of words between two talent/eloquent people. thank you for allowing us to enjoy this post. and THANK YOU!!!!!! for stopping by my blog and liking every one of my posts!!! that absolutely made my day!! peace and love.
Thank you for your compliments.
Yes, I enjoyed my visit and plan to return. You have some interesting thoughts and “voice” – keep up the good work.
All good wishes, Eric
Hi Eric! Thank you for liking one of my posts. I was browsing around your blog and I really find it a masterpiece….With all the awards…man you really deserved it!Keep posting 🙂
Hello Kaye,
Thank you and I enjoyed your post too.
Cheers, Eric 🙂
I only just tried some Haiku for the first time in the last couple of days (I’m not much into poetry). This is a cool post though. Some good ones in there.
Well done to you both!
Thank you and all good wishes, Eric
excellent – thoroughly enjoyed the alchemy…God bless & love always…
anil
Oh Anil, peace to you always, Eric
what a delighful journey….both of you are so good with words…loved the haikus…this makes Blogging n sharing so much fun
Hello Soma,
Thank you for your encouraging words.
Perhaps one day we could make a similar journey… 🙂
All good wishes, Eric
Eric, you are so right about the adrenalin rush–I was bouncing off the walls! You are living inspiration and I must say again thank you. I will always treasure this experience with you.
xoxo Jeannie
Awww Jeannie, you are sweet. That was a great tango and what a lovely partner I had 🙂
Good haiku form both
Thank you Dennis, much appreciate your visit and comment. Cheers, Eric
Yay!!!
I love this! This is ‘workshopping writing’ at its best…
thank you for sharing the work and the process..
Peace, Jen
Thank you Jen.
I simply love the way you burst with words Yay!!! It brightens up my day 🙂
Luv and peace, Eric
I think I’m loving Haiku!
Thank you Fia – so, hope to read some of yours too 🙂
Haha. I do hope to make one,but I think I need to learn more about this Haiku! 🙂
Again with the haikus … You’re changing my mind about the form. But what really works for me here is the conversational nature – because they play off of each other. And the form is short enough to be very effective in collaboration.
You are right – the conversational when accomplished within a short timeframe of minutes…gives an adrenalin rush…
Thank you for stopping by with this encouragement Kilroy. Have a great weekend ahead, Eric
I agree, her blog is one of my favorite places to visit. And yes, I think in time the universe will lead her back to prose …
Yes and lets hope so…
Thank you Eric, for sharing our fun time and for your very kind words. I hope to be able to live up to them. And, let me say, you are a tremendous confidence booster and very talented yourself. Your kind and loving spirit shines through!
xoxo Jeannie
Oh Jeannie,
Your words wash over me with warmth…and coming from a talented and gracious person…
We had a blast, didn’t we.
Have a great weekend ahead,
Eric 🙂